1 Busy 2 Cheap/Taste
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Part 1 Prompt: Busy, On the
go: I need FF for my busy
lifestyle.
Brainstorming: •
Have
job and college classes •
Do
chores—cleaning yard/house, laundry, kitchen •
Help
and do things with friends: clubs, games •
Am
sports, school, park, party, etc. taxi •
Pick
up or drop off younger ones •
Have
class projects/homework •
Save
time and save money •
Use
public transportation •
Go
shopping for food 1.
Chores—clean yard and house, do laundry, clean up after kids 2.
Help friends & family 3.
Do things with friends & family 4.
Waste time using public transportation 5.
I’m a taxi for sports, school, park, parties, etc. 6.
Have job 7.
Have college classes 8.
Go shopping for food 9.
Go clubbing w/friends
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Become: 1.
Frustrated 2.
Upset 3.
Mad 4.
Angry So can’t function, Can’t Focus Busy,
On the go: Prompt: I eat Fast Food, so I can reduce stress and do my school work & other
responsibilities Strengthening an Essay with Examples Red
= Topic Sentence
As an inexperienced hiker, I often get in trouble
because I am more concerned about minor dangers, such as a rare, harmless
snake. I pay less attention to serious dangers like dehydration and exposure
to extreme cold. For example, I
once hiked into the Grand Canyon with one granola bar and a very small bottle
of water. Therefore, I became severely dehydrated and was too weak to climb
back up without help from a passing tourist group, making the return to the
top on mules. I was lucky. Topic Sentences: Blue
Examples: Bold The Hazards of
Going-to-movies
I am a movie fanatic. My friends count on me to know movie trivia (who was
the pigtailed little girl in E.T.: The Extra-Terrestrial? Drew
Barrymore) and to remember every big Oscar awarded since I was in grade
school (best picture 1994? Forrest Gump). My friends, though, have stopped
asking me if I want to go out to the movies. While I love movies as much as
ever, the inconvenience of going out, the temptations of the theater, and the
behavior of some patrons are reasons for me to wait and rent the video. To begin
with, I just don't enjoy the general hassle of the evening. Since
small local movie theaters are a thing of the past, I have to drive for
fifteen minutes to get to the nearest multiplex. In Addition, the parking lot is shared with several restaurants
and a supermarket, so it's always jammed. I have to drive around at a snail's
pace until I spot another driver backing out. Then it's time to stand in an endless line, with the constant
threat that tickets for the show I want will sell out. If we do get tickets,
the theater will be so crowded that I won't be able to sit with my friends,
or we'll have to sit in a front row gaping up at a giant screen. Lastly, I have to shell out a
ridiculous amount of money-up to $8-for a ticket. That entitles me to sit
while my shoes seal themselves to a sticky floor coated with spilled soda,
bubble gum, and crushed Raisinets
Second, the theater offers tempting snacks that I really don't need. Like most of us,
I have to battle an expanding waistline. At home I do pretty well by simply
not buying stuff that is bad for me. I can make do with snacks like celery
and carrot sticks because there is no ice cream in the freezer. However, going to the theater is like
spending my evening in a Seven-Eleven that's been equipped with a movie
screen and comfortable seats. As I try to persuade myself to just have a diet
Coke, the smell of fresh popcorn dripping with butter soon overcomes me.
Chocolate bars the size of small automobiles seem to jump into my hands. I
risk pulling out my fillings as I chew enormous mouthfuls of Milk Duds. Consequently, by the time I leave the
theater, I feel disgusted with myself. Many of
the other patrons are even more of a problem than the concession stand. For example, title kids race up and
down the aisles, usually in giggling packs. Teenagers try to impress their
friends by talking back to the screen, whistling,
and making what they consider to be hilarious noises. Adults act as if they were at home in their own living room.
They comment loudly on the ages of
the stars and reveal plot twists that are supposed to be a secret until the
film's end. And people of all ages create distractions. For instance, They crinkle candy wrappers, stick gum on their seats, and drop popcorn tubs or cups of
crushed ice and soda on the floor. In
addition, they also cough and burp, squirm endlessly in their seats, file out for repeated trips to the rest
rooms or concession stands, and elbow me out of the armrest on either
side of my seat. In conclusion, after arriving home from the movies one night, I decided that I was
not going to be a moviegoer anymore. I was tired of the problems involved in getting to the theater, resisting unhealthy
snacks, and dealing with the patrons.
The next day, I arranged to have premium movie channels installed as part of my cable TV service, and I also got a membership at my local
video store. I may now see movies a
bit later than other people, but I'll be more relaxed watching box office hits in the comfort of my own living room. Langdan, College Writings with Readings |
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